Il la revoyait avec sa passerelle où les gens passaient à la queue leu leu ; il revoyait aussi le grand bassin où les chalands avaient l’air de s’ennuyer comme s’ils étaient en pénitence, et les maisons qui se miraient tout entières dans le canal et qu’on voyait tout à l’envers.
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He pictured it again with its footbridge where people passed in single file; he also pictured the large dock where the barges seemed to languish as if doing penance, and all of the houses which could be seen reflected upside down in the canal.
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marina 20707
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He pictured it again with its footbridge where people passed in single file; he also saw the large basin where the boats looked bored as if they were in penance, and the houses entirely mirrored in the canal, which could be seen upside down.
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marina 20707
1 week, 2 days ago
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Thanks Wendy.
by marina 1 week agoHello Marina, just a couple of suggestions:
by Merlin57 1 week agoHe pictured it again with its footbridge where people passed in single file; he also pictured the large dock where the barges seemed to languish as if doing penance, and all of the houses which could be seen reflected upside down in the canal.
I suggest the use of 'dock' to give an immediate clearer picture to the reader.
I suggest to use 'languish' because it has the meaning of : existing in an unpleasant situation or place without progress, like languishing in jail or obscurity. This immediately gives connection to the word 'penance' which follows.
'in the canal, which could . . .' strictly speaking, this 'which' refers back to the canal, meaning the canal could be seen upside down, rather than the houses.