Aus der Maske hervor aber blitzten zwei Augen, so unheimlich, so glühend, daß die beiden Herren in der Gondel betroffen zurückprallten.
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But behind the mask two eyes flashed, so eerie, glowing with such intensity that the two men in the gondola recoiled in shock.
Translated by markvanroode 8623 11 months, 3 weeks ago
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But two eyes flashed out from behind the mask, so eerie, so glowing, that the two gentlemen in the gondola recoiled in shock.
Translated by markvanroode 8623 1 year ago

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Thanks, Wendy.

by markvanroode 11 months, 3 weeks ago

But behind the mask two eyes flashed, so eerie, glowing with such intensity that the two men in the gondola recoiled in shock.
(I suggest an addition to 'glowing', so as to give more of a sense of eerieness - otherwise 'glowing' has the connotations of beauty, of softness and fullness.)

by Merlin57 11 months, 3 weeks ago