Ganz sachte, denn die Scharniere kreischten, öffnete ich sie so weit, daß ein einziger feiner Strahl auf das Geierauge fiel.
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Very gently, because the hinges squeaked, I opened it just so far that a single fine beam fell on the vulture's eye.
- Danke..besser James
Translated by anitafunny • 36556 7 years, 5 months ago
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Very gently, because the hinges squeaked, I opened it just so far that a single fine beam fell on the vulture's eye. ...
- A change in word order and adding "just" makes it even better. :-)
Translated by DrWho • 36587 7 years, 5 months ago
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Very gently, I opened it so far, because the hinges squeaked that a single fine beam fell on the vulture's eye.
Translated by anitafunny • 36556 7 years, 5 months ago

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